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Cascading into the sharp ravine,
the pitfall that is my exhausted heart-
quickly depart, treasured like caffeine.
It's obscene, the paintings in my head,
not like I've ever seen, I feel so dead.

Flutters of promise snared in the wind,
starving like a shadow, yearning a touch.
Didn't say much, selfishlessly I grinned,
the butterflies thinned, ripped to the bone;
how attractive are you without cologne?

Sunlight is chancing romance away,
gasping for patience, I desperately write-
see whats inside? Stutter in your dismay.
The end of the play, there is no escape;
from the passages of doubt- that shape.

The definiton of love hides in your eyes,
persuaded by the perputrador to conceal-
nothing is real! Caught in your disguise,
ultimate demise, the walls are crumbling
in the ceremonial hall you are mumbling.

Fractured by my defeat, and restricted
from the words that seed the conclusion,
nightmare's beatiful intrusion inflicted-
wounds; afflicted from your bold silence;
nurture thoughts of commiting violence.

Compromising solutions in every breath,
chasing the evil that barricades the road
bestowed with this curse until my death.
Confess to myself, I decimate the mourners,
urgently needing a shortcut to cut the corners.

The momentum waits for the coming collapse;
angels weaping dusty tears for our broken affair,
suicide in prayer, will there be an answer? Perhaps.
Caught in all traps, I'm hindered from progression,
eagerly awaiting the answer to my question.

The windmill continues this broken story,
the answers dry, decapitated in the breeze;
Oh I ache for release, to no longer be quarry.
I beg you please, don't kiss heavens blood-
and become like me, another puddle of mud.
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Depression.

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:icondarkestebony101:
Wow, once again emotions really come through. Though I know the exact feelings, right now I'm dealing with some rather depressing issues. This style is a little different from the last I read and I enjoyed it, your word choice is wonderful,

Cascading into the sharp ravine,
the pitfall that is my exhausted heart

That is exactly how I feel, great word choice, beautiful job.

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:iconmisery-pain-love:
The thoughts seem disconnected, but the peom flowing, an odd mix that somehow for you turns out wonderfully
and The emotion felt in this is defeaning

Through the last line disapointed me slightly, it still had the sadness locked into it, but the word choice was, dull
atleast for you're work.

Depression is depressing :hug: Find a way to fix it, or continue to live with it, because it's a rarity that it will just go away

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Love is a chemical imbalance in the brain.
:icongalabrotix:
Your comment about my word choice being dull actually inspired me with my poem I decided to write and I tried my best to be more vigorous and as interesting as I could possibly be. I hope it turns out well!

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"My teeth were jail bars, unsurpassable
So those words remained within my head"

Aeziba, 'Tell Me What To Say'.

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:icongalabrotix:
Depression is so vast and so defining that there is literly so many brutal and frightening ways to describe it.

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"My teeth were jail bars, unsurpassable
So those words remained within my head"

Aeziba, 'Tell Me What To Say'.

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((Note me for my Msn))
:iconswallowinghearts:
I love this. Which is odd, since it's about depression, but once again - your language is amazing. My favorite line in this is "Flutters of promise snared in the wind." Very unique use of the word "flutters" and it works well in this piece. To me this seems like someone's mulling over everything gone wrong/lost in their own language. Like if the narrator tried to explain their feelings to someone naturally (as in the poem) the listener wouldn't be able to understand. I definitely get that notion, and love the way it got through the words in your poem. Awesome work! :)

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And so the cold came –
Without warning, without sound.
With tendrils of ice that thickened,
As the tides of Summer unwound.


~Swallowing Hearts~

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